A change in system

"In god we trust" is powerful
2 cents closer to new found strength
Capitalism oh so wonderful

Individuals, gone just another ritual
Young and old with all intent
For the faith and spiritual

Told "Yes We Can"
Everyones gotta make a stand
Nah lets kick that can

Go get us some oil lands
Cuba, Iraq, some Latin
Gotta protect that democracy brand

Response How Poems Arrive

How poems arrive is a meta critique on poetry writing. The poet tells of the elusive quality poems and of a readers response to such a poem. When I first read through the poem I felt that the poet was acting similar to a advisor. The poet gives advice and insight onto how satisfying it is to understand a poem. It was almost like a new parent telling you the struggles and rewards of parenthood. Lines like "but poems, butch or feminine, are vain And draw their satisfaction from within," can be seen as a comparison between poems and newborns. Because a newborn can be either male or female and also quiet vain. The title of the poem "How Poems Arrive" can also be interpreted as an illusion to birthing. A poem is written/created but the poet specifically chose to use the word arrive to describe its creation. Similarly child are also described as arriving into the lives of parents despite it being parents who create them. There are other instances with word choice that the poet connects life and poems together such as the usage of words like "pulse" , "els" and "ms". The "els" and "ms" of poems both refer to the rhythms a poem can posses which are quiet similar to the sounds an infant might make. I might be reading too much into this poem but I do believe that whether it was intentional or not the author does subtle compare poems to infants.

Sonnet

Hello all, I wanted to share a Sonnet that I wrote last semester for my theatre class. A Sonnet is a poem composed of 14 lines using any formal rhyme scheme, in English usually having ten syllables per line. One of the best known Sonnet is "Sonnet 18" by William Shakespeare, (Shall I compare thee to a summer's day). You should read it when you have time, it's incredible writing. Anyway, here's my attempt at writing one.

I lost my beloved: By Adonis Mateo

It was a cold dark evening, then a light

The sound of my voice ran far and beyond

I could hear my own echo taking flight

I listened for a moment please respond

As the cold wind danced I felt the abyss

I drift into madness and to despair

Where is sanity? I searched but I missed

As the night turned to day how can I bare

My beloved I am filled with regret

Might I find thee, will I see thee again

Will thee remember me or see a threat

Fate has betrayed me I feel the disdain

I ponder the Stars, there thine eyes gleaming

I ponder the Stars, there thou is dreaming

A Mistake In Truth

                                                A Mistake In Truth: By Adonis Mateo




We all make them
Sometimes we don't mean to
Other times they come with a stem

Things happen, things change
Governments and corporations always talk
they're hard to decipher and understand, how strange

Misguided or misunderstood try to elevate
Eagles fly high above, away from treachery
Can I be like them, will you meet me at the gate

Hold on tight to sanity and wisdom
Learn to learn things that are not taught
Stay true to yourself, forget egoism, practice altruism

How Poems Arrive

How poems arrive by Anne Stevenson, is very interesting because its a poem describing how poems come to be; at least by her interpretation.  She says love "they're strongest when admitted blind, judging by feel, feeling with sharpened sense while yet their need is undefined." Meaning that like love, a poem is open for suggestion and not judge-mental.  It is free to flow any way it wants to and needs no reason why.

How did poems arrive?

Some say they are real 
Others may not believe 
Are there any documents sealed 

Confidential information, we soon retrieve 
Are they, beautiful flawless creatures
Or are they ugly and green 

Do they all move as one, or one leader 
There's more to it, rather looking in a screen 

Second group critique

The group critique we did today was very helpful. The advice I was given by my classmates have made it easier for me to continue with my work.